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Patterns in darkness

Dark were the nights when lights from towns and cities could not find me

limping through the furrowed fields, blind except the few short metres and

flashes of the daisies in the fields.

 

Lambent came the moon’s dim glow above towering hedgerows that

passed through clouds and forks in canopies of threatening trees

and made a thousand faces in the leaves.

 

And I from evening not long from thronging streets and pubs had come;

to me, mermaids’ songs lilted still back earlier on the sunset

sadly asking if beauty ever walks free.

 

Faces in the canopies that leered and morphed from abstract shapes:

gargoyle-like grotesqueries.  When gusts gaped leaves, the same they asked

of ugly; but why ask that of me?

 

Close and clinging felt the mist, as I stood frightened lost and drunk

and wracked with sadness that descends from emptied glasses’ bow lips

that fill the empty and empty the filled.

 

Now, faces of clouds’ voracious mouths devoured the moon’s dim glow,

and now no light would light the maniacs that hid and whispered talk

between cornstalks, where I now walked.

 

The madmen whispered again to me the corollary of the mermaids’ song

as I continued my walk home, along the unlit path, looking not right nor left

but over my shoulders fretfully.

 

From evening I not long from streets had come but streetlights couldn’t find me.

Now I walked through the corn and tried to hold my head up high and walk on;

ugly does walk free, ugly walks alone.

◄ The Kestrel

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DG

Mon 21st Dec 2009 22:03

Thanks Ann

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 21st Dec 2009 07:38

Hello Dermot, being fairly new to WOL I have just discovered you because of your recent blogg, and I am reading your poems and I like them very much. Esp this one, so far! Nice to find you! ;-)

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DG

Sun 5th Jul 2009 15:21

Hi Freda, no there is only one (William Yeats). Most of his stuff is modernist for several reasons:
1. Whilst he did all that celtic twilight stuff, he also did an awful lot of stuff that had themes that could only come from urban living and his work shows that he is exposed to both the convenience of modern living and also its stressfulness. The lake isle of innisfree is a good example of this last, but also there are such colections as meditations in a time of civil war. Examples of the latter include so much of his material that shows increased solcialisaion and access to culture that comes with city living with so much stuff about public gardens and theatres etc. He was brought up a rational atheist which was in keeping with the modern era and logical posistivism as a doninating strand to modernist philosophy. His refrains especially, but also to a large extent his stanzas are not often verses and they resist classical breakdown methods. This last arises form the fact that Yeats harked back to the ancient Irish accentual rhythms and he is the earliset modernist I know of to break with the strict long/short syllable metering of the classical period and to start writing according to stresses in that particular way. He also used semiotics and referencing to a great extent, again characteristically modern.

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Freda Davis

Sat 4th Jul 2009 22:44

Hi Dermot, I found this interesting considering the discussion about modernist forms that we were having. I am still puzzled by your reference to Yeats, Is there more than one Yeats? I cant find anything modernist in my collected Yeats.

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DG

Tue 16th Jun 2009 18:00

Thanks all. Janet's not far off the mark with the subtext being that of feelings of isolation feeding a negative self image (and a negative self image feeding further isolation. The other stuff in there (reading back on it) comes from a conversation I had about ghosts with a friend recently and how our minds make human faces out of things and hear sounds as voices and about a place where I once lived (where I had to walk across pitch black fields and through a maze of towering cornstalks to get home from the pub).

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Chris Dawson

Tue 16th Jun 2009 16:37

I know what Winston means - I, too, could imagine Magwitch wandering about the fields a bit....! - Quite Dickensian in places.
Enjoyed the poem, but wondered about the drawing together of being drunk .... and wondering about being alone/being ugly etc.... perhaps it just reminded me of too many conversations I've had with men who attempt to get a bit 'deep' when they've had a few ............ 'I reaally love you, no, no - ya don' unnerstan' ... I mean ... I reeeally think 'at you're.....zzzzz!'
Good, lively imagery though.
Cx

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Gus Jonsson

Tue 16th Jun 2009 15:29

Dermot Just had to post comment this is a wonderful read... and I am really sorry oif it's way off the mark but I have a timorous beastie ...field mouse character in my minds eye...masterful use of image and wordcraft...

Faces in the canopies that leered and morphed from abstract shapes:

gargoyle-like grotesqueries. When gusts gaped leaves, the same they asked

of ugly; but why ask that of me?

Wonderful.. mind you I once went to a party in Wigan and all the girls were like that.

Gus

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Tue 16th Jun 2009 10:09

Hi Dermot,
the whole time i was reading this i couldn't get Thomas Hardy out of my head. I know very little of the poet so have no idea if it is relevant.

I like the imagery very much, it's a sad truth for lonely people wondering why they're still alone, trying to find that special someone or something to allay their fears. Then after a while they begin to lose self confidence and it's a continuous fighting battle. ( well that's how i see it anyway)

Janet. :-)

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winston plowes

Mon 15th Jun 2009 22:28

striking journey through the fields Dermot. Sounded like a convict on the run at first. Winston

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