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Lazy Evening

Drop...drop...drop,

Piece by piece, drop your guard...

Let the world know your true self..the skin underneath the vessel!

Touch me not, the heavy burn will erase us both..

Blow me out, the rain digs my heart anyway...

Take a sip while its hot, oh dear, don't let the taste linger,

A spell casts would be difficult to break!!!

Ignore, ignore...

Life is a pool of flooded maniacs...

Let it go!!! A dust on the earth...won't hurt you much!!!

◄ Pain

Maria ►

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Rims

Mon 18th Jan 2016 12:18

thank you Vicki and Ray for your comments, appreciation and suggestions! Really appreciate. The poem was a sudden 5 minute outburst of emotions. Din't check so much...sorry if it lacks some content!! Will keep it in mind next time!!! Vicki...damn right!!! Haha..thanks that you could relate to the 'skin underneath the vessel' ;) :) :)...

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Vicki Ayers

Thu 14th Jan 2016 19:31

Hi Rims - I like this but agree with Ray that the 'oh dear' seems out of place - it's a stronger line without it I think - but it's your poem! There is some lovely wording & I like your discription of a 'skin underneath the vessel' I can identify with that! Xx

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