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Morning Mass

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Foot-torn, the path of leaves.

Dead, borders are green, still.

I am white.  I turn.

I am now looking with paled eyes,

across a broken pit of river

up, above some untidy shack;

the train on the hill climbs,

smoke billows, a raincloud summoned

from beyond.

I turn back and see rows,

of autumn-blushed houses

fall silent on this minute.

You are only a passing mist.

A shuddered halt, a breath held.

Sound then spreads a slow grin;

the whistle spills idle chatter

down a nettled hill.

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raypool

Tue 29th Mar 2016 20:38

Like a Monet painting with sound effects ! So much subtlety in a simple scene is a great skill and viewed from an internalised interpretation. I like the steam engine prop to flesh it all out.

Ray

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