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Cigarette Burns

Forty eight

Smoked

Two

Every

Hour

 

Tray

Overspills

With

Carcasses

Of the

Day

 

Ashes

Flicker

And

Prance

 

Over

Precedents

And

Papers

 

Deep

Breathes

Focus

Concentrate

 

No room

For mistakes

 

Cigarettes

Burn

In many

Places

 

🌷(3) 

◄ Teaspoon

Thick Nib ►

Comments

Lynn Hamilton

Fri 6th May 2016 12:27

Mr LCTB! Of course, and I saved any decent docks. Thanks for reading and commenting.

Lynn x

Lynn Hamilton

Wed 4th May 2016 20:46

Thanks for reading and commenting. I do not purposely give short comments but if I feel you have seen the snapshot through the words what else can I say and ask for. Thank you x

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raypool

Tue 3rd May 2016 21:21

A really effective treatment of an everyday gesture with consequences to consider , deep layers of possibility, and your captivating short lines. Ray x

elPintor

Mon 2nd May 2016 22:01

I get the picture of a lawyer preparing a case. The final line is particularly weighty.

I've read a few of your latest poems and really enjoy the spacing tactic you use in your presentation..it moves like a camera shutter..a very effective device.

Thanks for putting up the great work.

elPintor

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Martin Elder

Mon 2nd May 2016 19:32

I particularly love the use of the word carcasses in this poem as it has some many possible interpretations.
Fab

Lynn Hamilton

Mon 2nd May 2016 19:02

Hi David

Thanks and you do. I just observed, emptied the ashtrays, refilled the coffee cups and never judged.

Lynn x

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