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Love Decides The Cast

Love Decides The Cast

Love did not arise

It sneaked up from behind

Love did not surprise

It just controlled the mind

 

All our senses swamped

All our logic shot

All desires inflamed

All at such a cost

 

Love burns so very bright

A supernova in our heart

Love takes us day and night

And breaks us when we part

 

All our futures centred

All passions reinvented

All numbers have been melted

All pathways now augmented

 

Love controls the future

Love ruled in the past

Love is there to endure

Love decides the cast

 

©Rhumour

April 30th 2008

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<Deleted User> (6356)

Sat 25th Jul 2009 00:11

Im no expert so no disrespect to anyone I just know what I like and I think this has a nice meaning behind it, its like describing a film romance I esp like the line love decides the cast :)

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 24th Jul 2009 19:31

Despite such fine ideas and the obvious desire to make a good poem , I find this still more like an exercise than a finished product. Tighten it up with exactly the right words that basically scan consistently and rhyme well. Weak rhyme should be used only sparingly.

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