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Aurora

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Sweetest black briars and cloudberries grow

amid a hedge of May.

Blue rampion rises between the thorns.

Impenetrable

barbed

defence

from which

the stone tower rises.

Clinging to the land

stone upon stone

wild flowers in every groove.

Swallows in every cornerstone and

windows open to the night.

With the dusk

fleeting birds become pipistrelle

but always,

a life, flies from the stone.

Circling,

moving, shadows

cut the evening air.

She lies, flat

on knotted wool.

Ropes of flaxen coil around circular walls.

She watches the night fall

dropping ripe berries into her awaiting mouth.

Deep blood red juices

run down her cheek

and the Northern Lights

ripple across the sky.

Dej Aug 09


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Ann Foxglove

Tue 15th Dec 2009 18:27

As in many of your other poems I really like your use of images from nature, makes it very visual for me.

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Isobel

Sat 22nd Aug 2009 08:53

Yep - a super poem - I would suggest Rapunzel Anthony - cos of the inclusion of rampion - which is what the father stole from the witch - nice to know that all those bed time stories I've read come in for some literarty use! The atmosphere created by the imagery is great - loved the blood red juices running down her cheeks - the atosphere is set.

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Jeff Dawson

Fri 14th Aug 2009 13:00

Blimey Deb, you're on a roll, beautiful words here with great imagery, great reading Jeff X

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Anthony Emmerson

Fri 7th Aug 2009 19:04

Hi Deborah,
I liked your imagery very much here - shades of "Sleeping Beauty/Snow White." Very much a fairy tale feel about it.
Regards,
A.E.

Steve Smith

Wed 5th Aug 2009 15:00

Beautiful, precise ,colours and movement.
Steve Smith

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 3rd Aug 2009 20:40

There is some sumptuous imagery here. I liked the juxtaposition between decay and the fresh, the dormancy and the life.

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