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Spick and Span

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The kitchen table’s nice and neat.

No tea stains, ash or traces.

No paper strewn.

The bed is huge.

My legs have room to stretch.

 

The dishes few, the bathroom clean,

no hair or splash or mess.

No rhapsody or midnight kiss.

The nights are wiped of snore and twitch

but I can’t sleep

and all I feel is mirrored in the order:

 

spick-and-span

and cleft and pang

bereft and bare and lacking.

 

You’re back tonight

to wreck this well-kept

apple-pie immaculate.

I await your disarray

with hunger and impatience.

 

 

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Jeff Dawson

Sat 26th Nov 2016 07:50

Nice one, like a show home! Quite calm for you this one Laura! Thanx for comments on Bolton Calling! I've spent many an hour on the A666 ! Ha ?

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Laura Taylor

Wed 5th Oct 2016 09:44

Cheers Martin ?

He's home now. I slept like a sleepy baby last night ?

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Martin Elder

Wed 5th Oct 2016 00:19

I am with Stu on this one. I particularity love the line
The nights are wiped of snore and twitch.
Love it.

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Laura Taylor

Tue 4th Oct 2016 11:37

Ah cheers Stu!

Heh. Bob's the messy one in our house ? He's away gigging in Portugal - hence the poem. I crave order and SURFACES darling, SURFACES, but I can't wait for him to come home and be all messy again ?

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Stu Buck

Tue 4th Oct 2016 10:55

brilliant!

i actually really resonate with this, one way or the other.

my ex was a devout disciple of keeping things airy and soulless, bereft of any sense of life. i am a proud mess man myself, to a point.

one doesnt want to live in a showhome really...

i love the way this reads, its got great assonance all the way through and the little sing song verse in the middle is the best of all, hinting at the mindset of someone who has to be pristine all the time but secretly longs for a little bit of dirt.

great stuff.

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