Haiku Collection #10
ant on the chessboard
moves to the colouring book
with her own logic
~~~
one duck dives-
here we are all eyes strained
for the new position
~~~
just to sit and wait
with jackdaws on high branches-
storms may pass us by
~~~
summer almost passed
for a snail glued to concrete
...princely inner life
~~~
worm out in the rain,
which olympic discipline
do you most admire?
Stu Buck
Mon 10th Oct 2016 19:52
i very much enjoy haiku, they are how i started writing poetry and i have had several published in various publications. for me, and this is just a personal opinion, i prefer the ones that transcend mere description and become ethereal and worldly. so here, i would opt for two and three, as the final lines of both transport the piece to a place where i feel i am happy with the whole piece but i have to work to provide an image in my head overall. i have commented before on your work, and i think i said pretty much the same thing.
the very best book i own on the subject is basho's complete haiku. its every haiku the man ever wrote, in both japanese and english form. its a wonderful tome
https://www.amazon.co.uk/Basho-Complete-Haiku-Matsuo/dp/1568365373
again these are just my own opinions, i would never call myself an expert on the haiku, far from it, but i do enjoy the form very much.