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I love you the Sky

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She said The sea must be a lady

“The sea is me”, she meant

I took her words to be a fact, a factor in own my identity

I am sure that  I am the shore

And at day break, I was still pure

Caramel, sandy and tan before I am kissed

Kissed wildly by the sun that melanises

Ebony to green, the sun that photosynthesises

And from your violent waves, My kinky hair a frizz

Awaken to a drunken state consciousness

You’re melody in my ears, harmonizing with the wind that moves you.

Swaying you, back and forth, coming in and out from afar

Then crashing in to destruct me beautifully

In heaps and heaps of clarity I saw My own Purity

Dunes to the end of a rivers mouth it flows

Engulfed as whole

No regrets, I adore you

You and I

You and me

You are me

“I am she” SZA

The Goddess of forbidden love

We became the beach that castles are made of

And where melinated kingdoms were washed away

Out of history, out of memory

“Stay”

Kings and queens submitting in a trance of dance to the beating rain

To the humming winds

The distance winds of the east that is,

The soft, warm currents of Mozambique

Southern Africa, do speak

And Roar Loudly to the west

“When your breath be too sweet for your lips to hold”

Love rain,

And when sorrow your thoughts fill

Drain, back to the ocean you must go.

“Drowning”, Instantly, suddenly to your pending absence

And my beats instantaneous, discontinuous in broken notes of your departure

The tide is low

But I am high

I cried ‘I love you the sky’

You say, I am ‘only the deep ‘blue ocean’ that mirrors you’

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Crystal mind ►

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Rachel Mhlongo

Wed 19th Jul 2017 21:35

Hi Phillip Kelly! oh wow, thank you so much. I really appreciate how you analysed the poem❤. Thanks for the encouragement, I have a few (poems) in my pc but I have been so hesitant to post them, fearing they are not very good, my English is not perfect ?. Thank you very much though?

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Phillip Kelly

Wed 19th Jul 2017 20:23

Wow i really like this poem.... The similes and metaphors comparing people to sea and shore and sky..... The way you almost personify them...... And the way u struture the poem .... Like here............. ....... No regrets, I adore you

You and I

You and me

You are me

“I am she” SZA

The Goddess of forbidden love

Truly amazing work.... Please write more.... Love the narrative style

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Rachel Mhlongo

Wed 19th Oct 2016 20:23

Hi Colin. Thank you very much.

And yes, I am African

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Rachel Mhlongo

Wed 19th Oct 2016 20:17

Hey Adriana. Thank you for your comment. You interpreted it right. I guess the first part is about a girl who is in a relationship with someone she identifies as the sea. However, the poem is also inspired by various musical artist I like to listen to like Willow Smith from a specific song she has called 'Sound'. In the song she openly says the sea is a lady, someone she tries to save from their own rage. Herself. I guess that is where it all started, I tried to put myself in the position of Willow, but in this case, the lady being mighty, yet beautiful and very desirable. So in that first verse, the person she 'looses' her self to is not a man, but a woman, herself.

She becomes one with the person or the sea and with the entire atmosphere of the scene as seen throughout the poem. It seems the sea and all her surroundings including the sun complement who she is and continue to shape her perfectly. In her elation, she reflects on a kingdom for them that was washed away (this has some political undertones to it). Yet, she also takes pride in the fact that she fought for that kingdom still ('roar loudly to the west'). However, her fantasy ends when the sea moves back in with the tide, leaving her yearning for her/his presence still.

I would say its a love story with a hint of national pride to it. I guess its a lot of feelings in one poem.I hope you can also gather your own meanings from it.

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Tom Harding

Wed 19th Oct 2016 20:12

some very interesting imagery here! nice

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Wed 19th Oct 2016 16:09

I love some of the rhymes you have found:

melanises / photosynthesises
frizz / consciousness
Mozambique / speak

thanks for posting your poem Rachel. Can I ask, are you in Africa?

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