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take me to tokyo where the lights may blind me

 

I am smoking in bed and reading an article about 

The human soul weighing the same as a cigarette 

While my daily allowance of untapped clamor 

Forms snow like crusts on the eggshell sheets 

How do people keep it together in this world 

When only sleep winds back the ball of yarn 

That unravels slowly throughout the day 

A wet thread of fatigue that snakes through my house

There are sounds that only occur in silence 

A childs tears drying on shellshocked cheeks 

The days sneak under the sun, over the moon 

People knock on my door and tell me about jesus 

How he died for my sins and is waiting for me  

He must have died a thousand times 

For what I did to you 

Curly hair matted with sweat 

Discord on the radio

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◄ a clenched fist full of your ribs, balaam, would mend the ways of many who are lost at sea

upon this tidal wave of young blood ►

Comments

Travis Brow

Wed 30th Nov 2016 06:59

This is brilliant Stu; forgive the pseudo bollocks, but there's a psychic weight to it that's palpable. My only issue is the last two lines; either more is required to round it out, or it could lose the last line. Quality writing nonetheless.

Travis.

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Martin Elder

Sun 27th Nov 2016 20:00

There are some great lines here Stu. I particularly love the third and the fourth. Stunning stuff.
Great poem

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Stu Buck

Fri 25th Nov 2016 18:38

thanks cynthia! and yes you are correct although he will be one in February!

i have a friend who visited tokyo a few years back and told me he used to stand in the middle of akihabara (possibly not spelling that right) and let all the noise and neon wash away the fact that he could not sleep.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Fri 25th Nov 2016 17:01

Don't you have a new baby in the household? If so, life in general must be taxing. Forgive me, if I'm wrong, but something is twinge-ing in my memory.

There are many fine ideas here, and well expressed.

Lights in Tokyo are indeed overwhelming. It sure is a catching title.

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Stu Buck

Thu 24th Nov 2016 14:41

thanks both! fine praise indeed. elP if this somehow finds its way on to your bulletin board i would be most pleased.
this was written last night david during a particularly shite nights sleep so i think you are right. ive been so wrapped up in this god awful book im writing i havent felt i could express myself properly for ages, this is what came out!
im taking the day off today so im looking forward to reading through some of the stuff i have missed on here.

elPintor

Thu 24th Nov 2016 01:24

I want to print this and post it to my bulletin board..hope you don't mind me saying so, but I like it that much. Quite swift follow-throughs in the imagery you use and the trails of thought you express.

elP

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