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WORLD OF PLASTIC

plastic people with plastic hearts

acting their thermoplastic parts

 

born of plastic from plastic tubes

fed from protuberant plastic boobs

 

with plastic hopes and plastic dreams

in love with plastic zippered seams

 

cleaning up their plastic mess

and plasticising happiness.

 

With pink and squidgy love they stick

plastic slow or plastic quick

 

they tan and tan and then go brown

they're the hottest things in plastic town

 

with plastic hopes and plastic smiles

flying over plastic clouds

 

looking down on plastic crowds

like an ultimately plastic God

 

who only sees the world in plastic

where all is well and quite fantastic.

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◄ THE TALE OF OLD SETH

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steve pottinger

Thu 5th Jan 2017 16:53

This would be a great performance piece, I think...

<Deleted User> (13762)

Mon 2nd Jan 2017 22:33

perfecto Raymondo ?

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raypool

Mon 2nd Jan 2017 22:12

No sooner said than done Col, I get your point entirely and hope you find this amended version pleasing. I'm not sure where my weird concepts come from but keep on reading 'em, aythangyow.
I do remember the song when I was in gig format myself.
Great that you reference that, I think I was a classic!

Raymondo.

<Deleted User> (13762)

Mon 2nd Jan 2017 20:57

I'm playing catch-up with your offerings Ray and this is simply wonderful although I feel you maybe lose your rhythm a little in the last 4 lines? I want to add another 'plastic' before clouds or maybe lose a line but I'm resisting the urge to offer further suggestions other than this:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=v98HEQvtpgo

C?L

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