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Night Music

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All night not sleeping

but tossing and turning over

some unfavourable thought

I lie listening to the bones of the house

creak like the inside of a piano.

 

Who's awake at this hour?

Just the mice rolling their life's luggage

across the attic floor,

running the gauntlet

between the suitcases and heavy coats,

little refugees sailing

their slim luck in the dark.

 

How heavy the world must sound

creaking and heaving about them,

the house caught in turbulent night winds

like a ship settling in

the dark waters of a flood.

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steve pottinger

Thu 5th Jan 2017 16:50

I'll echo what others have already said. The lines about
'little refugees sailing
their slim luck in the dark'

are just beautiful.

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Tom Harding

Sun 1st Jan 2017 22:54

Thank you all, some very kind words here

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 1st Jan 2017 19:08

Tom this is very very accomplished work.
The second verse is excellent, one perfect line is....
....little refugees sailing their slim luck in the dark....

Brilliant stuff.

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Paul Waring

Sun 1st Jan 2017 18:14

Hi Tom, I really enjoyed reading this evocative poem - so many great lines, especially 'I lie listening to the bones of the house creak'. Great. Paul

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raypool

Sun 1st Jan 2017 16:14

Fantastic sense of being involved in the poem, as always Tom. An economy of words , just enough to send the thoughts winging through the ether. The last three lines give a sense of disconcertedness and really hit the spot for me. The idea of almost humanizing and sharing small lives is in the best traditions of story telling.

Ray

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