The Whispering Winds
It's not the whispering winds.
The silent sleepers creep around.
They speak so loud, so proud.
Speak broken promises,
Truths I can't believe.
Are they there beside me.
I can't feel their breath but they are there.
Clear as day,
Dark as my heart.
They surround me -
Killers, crazed, wize,
forecasting the future
Whilst foretelling the past.
Splashing, screaming, scared.
I hear their voices,
Feel their pain,
Trust them.
Hate them.
Instructing, destructing, distrusting.
I have changed,
forgotten my self,
lost my mind.
A crying baby, a drowning girl,
A man so sad he needs help to die.
Close friends, true friends, pretend friend.
I don't want an imaginary friend,
I don't want company.
I want empty, gone, freedom.
Save me please.
Robert Mann
Thu 15th Jun 2017 14:53
Louise - there is a lot of pain expressed in this piece, but can I suggest you revisit it and perhaps edit it with fresh eyes. I think it can be made even better with a bit of judicious pruning. of course, this is just my opinion - feel free to ignore me.
Rob