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My Dearest Friend

You have proven to be my biggest ally, knowing

Me better than anyone else.

 

Shaping my thoughts into the paper canvas, opening

A door for them to see into my world.

 

Grateful I am for your help, lost

I would be without you.

 

Thank-you for being by my side, and

For encouraging me to never give up.

 

My dearest friend, my

Silver pen.

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E.M Chino

Tue 7th Feb 2017 16:33

Thanks for the advice Colin, it does sound smoother. Also, thanks Raj.

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Raj Ferds

Tue 7th Feb 2017 08:59

Enjoyed the personification Chino.
Agree with Colin, changing the 'it' to 'you' would underline that human touch.

Thanks for shaing that idea.
Raj

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Mon 6th Feb 2017 07:47

Ode to a silver pen - love it EM.

Might I suggest one tiny change - 'it' to 'you' in 'I wouldn't be without..'

Thanks for posting,
Colin

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