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solo sei piedi di terra ci rende tutti uguali

 

'only six feet of earth makes us all equal' - old italian proverb

 

these flowers remind me of the pale horse. like Sycorax, pulling strings 

blood red roses, dark brown earth strewn on a lifeless box of teak and tears 

 

how I would watch you extinguish the burning hot tip of a panatella on your tongue 

and we would peel off our sopping skin and dissolve into one another  

 

the stopwatch in your brain is counting down, you lift your skirt to show me the scars 

blood red roses waiting to spit black foam into your bloodstream 

 

and here is the child. a pale horse. ribs knit like chainmail

a clatter of plasma like dying stars

the doors of the ambulance hang open, a hearse driven by desperate hope

 

a lifeless box. 

 

sickly street lights stain your face with jaundiced years of flight

 

like Sycorax, pulling strings 

pulling open your tender core

spreading the gates of heaven

letting the pale horse ride through

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◄ apricots

for love ►

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suki spangles

Sat 11th Feb 2017 19:04

Hi Stu,

I first read this this morning, but didn't want to leave feedback straight away, because like most of your poetry - for me anyway - it is best enjoyed with repeated reading. It's immersive word-art. So I have now read it again a few more times, and it is still more mysterious for that - enticing.."read this again..read this again".

This is sometimes the difficult thing with leaving feedback: the mystery of poetry..

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Paul Waring

Sat 11th Feb 2017 09:00

Stu, this is a rich and evocative poem but I fear I may only have a partial understanding of the meaning of it all. But, despite that, what you've written is fascinating, your wonderfully creative and imaginative writing style conjures up such vivid and powerful images. And the use of repetition adds much to the piece.

Thanks Stu.

Paul

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Stu Buck

Sat 11th Feb 2017 06:24

thanks elP, glad you enjoyed it

elPintor

Sat 11th Feb 2017 01:04

Deep, dark and descriptive..I'm reading through the verses over and over--pulling through every detail I can grasp.

elP

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