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Saint James of the Field of Stars

A friend of mine recently completed the Camino pilgrimage of Saint James from Lourdes in France to Santiago de Compostela, in Galicia, Northern Spain. He did it in two section a year apart, and walked, rather than cycled, all the way. I have no idea how he got there.

 

Saint James of the Field of Stars

 

I'm a travelling cyclist

(the type with panniers,

sturdy boots, waterproofs)

and I have a thousand miles

to ride to Saint James

of the Field of Stars.

 

The spirit's freed, the demon's grieved,

a nascent Moon rising

over dormitory caravanserais;

'till we move on

as the finger traces the Atlas road,

and acknowledge senoras in the high towns

when they think I am a stranger,

and be humbled by their glances

and by their mountain eyes.

 

I'm out of place here,

but home, like the day-Moon

bedded in sun-blue

on the camino

or in Galician rain;

pump black hills, cursing,

swoop green dapple in cow-valleys,

a gift of grace and air

to fight temporary apostacies.

 

It seems half Europe has come this way;

they stamp my papers without smiling,

but sometimes invite me in

to their bars and vices,

to play the odds at cards

and alcohol,

without the risks of cycling.

 

Then pump the morning Primus,

wrap around the metal cup,

pack fifty miles in my saddle-bags,

see Saint James's journey

and hold to the scallop shell.

 

I met a pilgrim (a rain shadow):

no bike for her,

but cold as Moors on Winter coasts;

she knew how to cure blisters

and was bless'd,

 

but I sailed on and beat her

by half-a-day

to my final resting place -

an embrace at the cathedral

of Santiago de Compostela,

and my reward at the Parador which,

truthfully,

was no reward at all.

 

Chris Hubbard.

2002

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Chris Hubbard

Wed 22nd Feb 2017 11:37

Hi Colin,

On the choice between "I am" and "I'm", I must say that I often have this sort of internal debate about the formal versus the informal in my poems. They usually resolve into questions such as what tone, style, context, and so on am I attempting to portray.

If, for example, I was writing largely in the active voice to emphasize the immediacy or clarity of a line of stanza, I would be more likely to use 'I'm'.

In a contemplative, quieter mode I may tend, all else being equal, towards 'I am'. I would be looking to construct a careful, perhaps melancholic frame of mind for my protagonist. In that case I would tend to go more for the passive voice - being softer, or more conciliatory.

Another issue, I think, is the extent to which the poet, as narrator, wishes to indicate distance of familiarity with the content and context of the agent's story.

Cheers,

Chris

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Tue 21st Feb 2017 08:51

I enjoyed reading this Chris. 'It seems half Europe has come this way' nicely sums up so much about modern travel and tourism although I get the context of pilgrimage over the ages too. But nevertheless, the reward can seem insignificant when crammed together with half of humanity from the airport check-in to the final destination, all camera clicking and selfie taking and ultimately unaware of why they have made the journey if indeed there ever was a purpose.

On a different note, when I write I often ponder whether or not to use shortened versions like 'I'm' or to write out the full 'I am'. 'I'm' is softer and lends itself more to the spoken word or conversational style of prose. 'I am' is a statement and comes across more positive and certain. I think in this poem I would have written 'I am' as both instances are definite statements if that makes sense? I wonder what you think Chris? I'm certainly no academic expert on English usage but keen to learn.

Thanks for posting this poem. Your style of writing is gentle and thoughtful and very readable. All the best, Colin

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