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The Taste Of Lisbon

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on sardined sea-brined air I taste Lisbon's

rich past from the Tagus that still aches

with saudade and melancholic cries of fado,

a story of men yearning to conquer the whole of

the sea. Sorrow sheds tears, and from above


a millefeuille of sea-facing structures hides 

the graffiti of grief behind blue-tiled facades.


below, shards of light reflect like glass

from intricate mosaics of cobblestones

around ornate squares, and my lips

are kissed by fruits of the sea.


in Café Martinho da Arcada I sit where Pessoa 

sat, tasting the espresso aroma of his words that 

speak to me from tables, chairs and nicotined walls. 


outside, a number 28 tram rattles past, grating and 

whining. The rain has stopped. A wagtail bobs by, 

full of knowing. I notice magnolia blossom. The first

taste of spring.

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Paul Waring

Mon 27th Feb 2017 21:04

Thank you Graham, I was delighted to read your kind praise. My partner and I could as easily moved to Porto as Lisbon and, in some ways, wish we had. But we have just over a week left here and I'm pleased that I've paid some sort of tribute to this fine city.

Thanks again.

Paul

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 27th Feb 2017 18:57

This is enigmatic stuff indeed Paul. I have never been to Lisbon but have been to Porto three times. This immediately conjured up the sights, smells and atmospherics of those visits too.
You have successfully nodded to the seafaring heritage of this great port, captured its painful songs and tasted it's individual cuisine. Good work!

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Paul Waring

Mon 27th Feb 2017 18:30

Thanks Raj and Martin, you've no idea how chuffed I was to read your comments. This was my first attempt at writing in this style and it was difficult to find the words and images to avoid it sounding like a travel brochure!

But if I've achieved even part of what I set out to do, then I'm mightily pleased. And at least it kept me away from writing daft ditties ?

Thanks again for your kind words.

Paul

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Martin Elder

Mon 27th Feb 2017 17:10

This is indeed a sparkling description of Lisbon. There is a richness of living breathing coloured life in all that you have written here.
Fabulous absolutely fab

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Raj Ferds

Mon 27th Feb 2017 16:30

You smarty pants. I enjoyed that Paul.

".....tasting the espresso aroma of his words that
speak to me from tables, chairs and nicotined walls".

Portugal has a charm of its own. I see a fishing village peppered with modest tavernas and cafes. I hear a lilting fado which brings a tear to me eye.

I'm getting carried away here.

Raj

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Paul Waring

Mon 27th Feb 2017 08:57

Thank you Stu, unbelivably generous praise. Reading it made the endless re-writes of this worthwhile. I found it so difficult to write this piece. And thanks for the tips, I've removed the 'and' from the penultimate line and will give serious thought to what you say about the first line.

Col, thanks again for your forensic eyes that notice so many things, including the 'and' I decided to remove from the beginning of the penultimate sentence. Stu was right.
And you are right about the slight predictability of some of the lines. And like I said to Stu, I found this incredibly difficult to write. It is my parting tribute to Lisbon and I wanted to include key elements of what I feel is the 'essence' of the place.

Thanks again chaps for the honest (and very helpful) feedback.

Paul

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Mon 27th Feb 2017 08:42

Yay for the wagtail. There is much to be admired here Paul especially those first 7 lines. I think however you possibly let yourself down a little with slightly predictable / unimaginative descriptions in the following 3 lines:
shards of light reflect like glass
intricate mosaics
ornate squares
but it's a minor point and maybe I'm being too picky.

out of curiosity, which 'and' is/was Stu referring to?

good stuff Paul and a welcome return from 'daft ditty' land.

Col

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Stu Buck

Sun 26th Feb 2017 18:52

wonderful. bloody wonderful. so much fancy wordsmithery and vivid, sensual language.

i wished and hoped that that first line would read simply

'on sardined sea-brine air I taste Lisbon'

as that would be achingly fantastic but i cant criticize any of it, its bloody great.

'a millefeuille of sea-facing structures hides

the graffiti of grief behind blue-tiled facades.'


clever bugger.

could you remove the 'and' from the penultimate line?

but really, i only ever critique those pieces i love dearly and would be proud to call my own!

'and my lips

are kissed by fruits of the sea.'

sensuous. takes me back to st malo, the salty coast, cheap seafood and fish soup with sand at the bottom of the bowl, dazzling blue seas and white yachts, cheap
wine and headaches on the drive home.

superb.

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