umeboshi/autumn

by Stuart Buck

Sunday 26th February 2017 6:47 pm

we must be brave when everything is taken away – janelle rainerz

i smoke the cigarettes of your father

green eyes red lights white ankles [scarsyourmother

wouldneverexplaintotheneighbours]

dirty leaves low autumn sun push finger into socket like an egg it pauses weeps

become beautiful for me as i move your tongue i own you

updownupdown

become beautiful for me let me taste you in all your glory like umeboshi like sweet girl honey

if you must collapse do so as if it is an age that is ending

look! how the world is burning, burning just for you

🌷(3)

◄ i am lost and you are lost so maybe we are not lost

it was an accident ►

Comments

Stu Buck

Tue 28th Feb 2017 08:07

thanks so much guys. i am really quite pleased with this piece, i often shy away from experiments in order to stay in a safe place where i know i can garner praise. but i felt the need to step out this time and see what i could do. i am happy you liked it and thanks for the great comments, they mean a lot to me.

Raj Ferds

Mon 27th Feb 2017 15:56

Superb Stu.
You're not only a good story-teller you're an artist too.

Raj

Martin Elder

Mon 27th Feb 2017 15:06

There is certainly some serious smouldering going on here Stu, so beautifully put right from
I smoke the cigarettes of your father through to burning just for you.
Marvellous

Paul Waring

Mon 27th Feb 2017 08:44

Intense, sensuous and beautiful Stu. It gets better the more I read it. And that line:

"if you must collapse do so as if it is an age that is ending"

Such a rich and fertile imagination you possess, sir.

Great work.

Paul

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