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MAN

Man
Man like stone
Man like mountain
Man like blood and bone
Man
Man like weather
      cold and slate gray
Man like steel
     sharp and double-edged both ways
Man
Man like hard
Man like beast 
Man like charred
Man 
Man like rough
Man like still
Man like tough
Man with heat like noon
Man with voice
      deep barrel chest boom
Man 
Man like God made
Man like on face to Jesus
Man like man saved

--by Dyphrent

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JM.Cole

Thu 23rd Mar 2017 22:47

Great use of repetition, nice flow. I much enjoyed.

<Deleted User> (13762)

Mon 13th Mar 2017 09:07

yes, agree with Stu. There's room to add some extra lines and take this places.

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Stu Buck

Sun 12th Mar 2017 16:23

this is excellent, the repetition really works and i would love to hear an impassioned live version, it would work really well.

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