THE ELEPHANT IN THE GARDEN
He had built a fort for the kids
with wood saved from a skip,
health and safety just a four letter word.
There were heady views over the neighbours,
added extras -
viewing platform
door with no purpose
no safety rails (not an extra).
Two old water butts for eyes
with ramps to a different level
like a masterpiece of confusion by Escher.
The kids became pirates
on a grounded ship,
stunt men and a maiden
Plastic swords hacked at fresh blossom
and in fantasy the sister was kissed.
I grew climbers to shield their view,
waited for a machine gun post,
but no enemy came
so they abused a trampoline,
balls came over the fence
a fusillade.
The fort builder split with his wife
the fort slowly rotted
though over - engineered,
viewing platform slumped
an expiring elephant on its knees
grey with age
but still the kids came back for more
a token force on the lookout.
They looked out for their Daddy
but he'd retreated on a horse with no name
and his wife didn't understand the game.
raypool
Wed 12th Apr 2017 20:22
Thanks all for your as ever in depth comments, and a compliment to my work .
David, I did feel desperately sorry for the kids - I've seen their development from the start, and could sense the traincrash coming. It has taken some patience and tolerance from me! Thanks my friend.
Col. The image of the elephant just sprang to mind, but your idea is brilliant, and I shall pay homage to that by adopting the title. The parallel was inspired by the sheer size and solidity of the fort. You have read in a lot as perceptive writers do. Cheers.
Paul, Good points thank you. The aging factor can be over a short period showing a decline and this certainly applies here. Bittersweet indeed! I am attracted to themes of decay actually.
Bless yer all.