awake again and seeing red
through midnight blue eyes swimming
in growing black pool pupils
--the groundhog sees his shadow
but mine never appears
though I know it follows
close behind, waiting for
the rising dawn to break the zenith
and mark the fall of another day.
Often I see poems I could read as pessemistic, even depressive, yet the writing is so good I can only feel happy for the esteemed author.
Bravo.
<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 29th Apr 2017 08:01
Caught perhaps between night and day at any given point and the struggle to break free of one's demons and move on, or back. The groundhog has its daily repetitive routine, sees its shadow moving with the sun's trajectory, is rooted in time unlike the author who feels adrift in that same ocean of time.
Okay, so that's my take and I'm happy to admit I'm probably miles off the mark but that's the beauty of an elP poem. Your words allow us to find our own trajectories.
C?L
Hi elP,
The title suggests the poem that might go one way, and then there is the line:
..the groundhog sees his shadow.. which can be as an almost "deja vu all over again" kind of vibe; one day melting into another, then another..
However, the next two lines turns the poem around on itself, almost, and then finally back to the beginning. The rise in the east to the fall..
Hope I have understood this.. Anyway, it works for me, and it is just after four in the morning, so the perfect time to read. There's a certain synchronicity there..
Nice one..
Suki
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elPintor
Mon 1st May 2017 00:42
Thanks for your comments, Suki, Colin, and Adam. I am always happy to hear your individual takes on what I write. They, each, never fail to capture some bit of the original essence in the writing. Though, there are some thoughts that cannot be entirely encapsulated within words--of even the author's, of that thought.
And, further thanks...I'm glad that each of you (FMF, David, JemJ, Paul, and Karen) liked it--unexpected, yet welcome, response.
elP