entropy
“no net ensnares me”
My alma mater
Tears and laughs choke me
They grip my heart and block my path,
by this I mean, my trachea
Epinephrine and dopamine slow
Withered and dry
Why can't i die?
Entropy always near
Why do i fight?
why do i care?
It's inevitable, this life on earth
Milliseconds to the bang
But why does it feel like an afterlife
Forever this pain
Eternity, this wait
<Deleted User> (13762)
Fri 5th May 2017 08:14
if this was mine I'd strip out the three question ? lines and perhaps even the 'forever the pain' line too. I think those four lines detract a great deal from what is a very good poem. Hope you don't mind me saying. Col.