The question of life
silence like violence caters for many
so I am just silent
in this world of words
a poet with few verbs
and one or two nouns
I wear a frown
underneath my mask
with my sadness bottled I drink from its flask
endless answer searching
perching like a sparrow on a branch
waiting for fate to crush me like an avalanche
I can never fly high enough
to avoid the rocks and snow
so I will wait for fate like a slave
for it to come get me
never mind freedom
I regret me
my choices
and habits
bleed me like leeches
life is a teacher
it teaches
as well as enslaves
but can it save
me from this mortal coil
like a god that is loyal
and saves
can I be set free
can I not remain a slave
to what I have become
thirsting for an answer
to the question of life...
Cynthia Buell Thomas
Mon 12th Oct 2009 18:29
Big topics, for sure, which must be explored, especially by poets. You seem very self-conscious, very 'I' oriented, and just pouring out these broad ideas one on top of another. I think you might select a single idea and develop it more intensely. All poets are 'I' oriented, but we learn to discipline our ideas to share them effectively. Connecting the title and the last line is very good.
By the way, I'm so glad that you really liked Disco Dancing, a poem expressing my love of uninhibited dancing. You were the only reader who 'got it'. Thanks.