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The question of life

silence like violence caters for many

 so I am just silent

in this world of words

a poet with few  verbs

and one or two  nouns

I wear a frown

underneath my mask

with my sadness bottled I drink from its flask

endless answer searching

perching  like a sparrow on a branch

waiting for fate to crush me like an avalanche

I can never fly high enough

 to avoid the rocks and snow

so I will wait for  fate like a slave

 for it to come get me

never mind freedom

I regret me

my choices

and habits

 bleed  me like leeches

 life is a teacher

it teaches

as well as enslaves

but can it save

me from this mortal coil

like a god that is loyal

and saves

can I be set free

 can I not remain a slave

to  what I have become

thirsting for an answer

to the question of life...

◄ To just be!

Rendition of my heart ►

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Mon 12th Oct 2009 18:29

Big topics, for sure, which must be explored, especially by poets. You seem very self-conscious, very 'I' oriented, and just pouring out these broad ideas one on top of another. I think you might select a single idea and develop it more intensely. All poets are 'I' oriented, but we learn to discipline our ideas to share them effectively. Connecting the title and the last line is very good.

By the way, I'm so glad that you really liked Disco Dancing, a poem expressing my love of uninhibited dancing. You were the only reader who 'got it'. Thanks.

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