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Dad's Poem

Watching the rhythmic rise and fall

of the breathing,

of the man

who was my Dad.

 

The family sitting in various positions

of anxiety.

Holding their breath

with each uncoordinated spasm and jerk.

 

Occasional disjointed speech,

riddles and ramblings.

Drifting in and out,

slow, slurred words

struggle to form.

 

A different breathing pattern

deeper,

peaceful.

Drops back to shallow,

monitored by anxious eyes. 

 

Brief bouts of agitation.

He can't explain,

stressed,

then back to sedate slumber.

 

The wind outside howls

in contrast to the heavy silence

of this small room.

We are all watching,

waiting,

wondering

how long now?

The collector of souls stands

somewhere near the door.

 

A new day dawns

but time has lost her markers.

Hour rolls into hour

in an endless stretch. 

In the dimness of the room

the clock has no meaning. 

 

Halting breaths,

a pause,

breathing resumes.

''We're here Dad.

We are all here.''

And the man who was my Dad

gently passes

to the next room.

🌷(5)

◄ Aunt Win (nie)

#notavictim ►

Comments

<Deleted User> (18118)

Wed 18th Oct 2017 20:41

Very moving.

Hannah

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raypool

Fri 11th Aug 2017 17:22

Fine work Jane. Those of us who have been in that position are uniquely affected. I made a bond with my mum so that entering into the pact of her dying and my closeness made the experience very personal and in a way acceptable . Mercifully she was ready and not suffering much though.
Having the poem in the present tense does add an immediacy to the piece.

Ray

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Jane C. Steele

Thu 10th Aug 2017 20:02

Thank you David, Tom and Wendy.
This was actually the first poem I ever wrote. I wrote it on my phone, in the hospital room. My family thought I was on facebook and told me off. They were slightly askance when I told them I was writing a poem. I didn't want to take photos, obviously not nice pics but I wanted to record it. The poem wrote itself and I haven't stopped writing since. Sounds terribly clichéd, but there you go.

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Wendy

Thu 10th Aug 2017 13:13

Hi just reading your poem Jane brought so many memories back my mum was 95 had dementure for 25 years when she died she was so small and watching her clinging on to life was very upsetting regards Wendy .

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Tom Doolan

Thu 10th Aug 2017 10:31

A lovely piece of work Jane. Very evocative and touching. T?

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Jane C. Steele

Thu 10th Aug 2017 09:20

Thanks Patricia - I put it up because your poem left such a mark.
Jx

patricia Hughes

Thu 10th Aug 2017 00:40

Beautiful poem,the death of a loved one leaves a mark.

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