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The Sun Shone

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Apologies for jumping, but it has been suggested that I should offer some explanation of the poem's layout.

The first 2 and final 2 lines are 'me' speaking. The remainder of the poem is my attempt at putting on to paper, my late wife's 35 year battle with MS, and the way she saw life, but from her point of view.

 

The Sun Shone

 

The sun shone,

                                                And she was mine.

 

I once had a life,

filled with expectation,

that now is changed

to fitful agitation.          

 

My eyes flash and flicker.         

The world is out of focus,

spinning out of control,  

and I am defenceless.               

 

When did this start?

Where will it end?

How far will I fall?

Will I break, will I bend?

 

Life is a barrage

of misdirected signals,

transmission gone awry.

Life is paroxysmal.

 

Power - ebbs;              

Lightning - strikes;

Fuses - blow;

Panic - spikes.

 

Acid - corrosive,

dripping, stripping,         

slowly devouring,

wholly consuming.                    

  

Lungs - bursting.

Mind - blowing.

Stomach - churning.

Nerves - tingling.

 

I choke on my words,

and all things sustaining,

yet scrap, for every bite

and breath remaining.

 

I will not be defined

by my condition.

My life is more

than this earthly perdition.

 

Rage is pointless,

solving nothing.

Fury is blinding,

and self-defeating.

 

There is much yet to do,

no time for self-pity.

My passion for life

will last for eternity.

 

And the sun set,

                                                For she was gone.

◄ Siren on the Rocks

Bobby Dylan ►

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gaia holmes

Wed 9th Dec 2009 16:19

Hi Steve, glad to see you again at 'The Puzzle' and as for your request...yes...I'd love to read the female voice-part in 'The Sun Shone' at the next Puzzle.

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 6th Dec 2009 11:30

Hi Steve, found your poem, thank you, and for your email too. I can't imagine how it would feel to experience an illness like this with the one you love, for you are both going through it together. My partner and I were lucky in the sense that he died instantly and unexpectedly, a heart problem that had never been detected and had never affected him until that last few seconds of his life. Makes it more of a shock, but easier to know they knew nothing about it and did not suffer. I think your "topping and tailing" of the poem makes it!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 8th Nov 2009 15:01

I didn't intend to be obscure. I meant that you have, by speaking through your wife's voice, very lucidly and poignantly captured the courage of living with an incurable and declining illness. I now understand better such an experience.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 7th Nov 2009 14:52

I am now a wiser woman Thank you.

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Isobel

Thu 5th Nov 2009 21:22

My earlier comment was completely adrift - didn't realise this was through the eyes of your late wife. She must have been an incredibly strong and inspiring woman. You read this very well at Hebden, Steve. x

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Neil West

Thu 5th Nov 2009 18:00

Hi Steve. I think in your poem you have communicated very effectively the destructive power of a terrible illness and the courage and dignity with which it was confronted. Thank you for sharing it.

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Isobel

Sun 1st Nov 2009 09:36

Your poem reflects well the turmoil of a mind that has experienced loss. The memories will always be there but 'passion for life' is a biggy and sometimes allows us to turn corners.

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