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Man of Many People.

Man of Many People.

 

 

In morning I feel like my dreams

Were a series of battle's

A multitude of character's

Magnified desires of control.

 

My skull is precariously packed

With people I do not know

From places I have not heard before.

They do not progress me.

 

Sometime's my mouth opens

And unfamiliar voices rise

From a throat that differs in thought.

It is positively terrifying.

 

Conflicting views fuck my opinion

With grave situations

Each politic has a go

Ideology can be a whore

At the best of times.

 

It is worst of all as the moon escapes

Into the bliss of obscurity

And finality seems a worthy cause

To fight for right now

If it means they will leave.

 

I am not myself.

 

I am my past and future.

 

Time is my witness

Every night I fall asleep

A stranger.

◄ Fear Theory

At Least We Tried. ►

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Jeff Dawson

Sun 29th Nov 2009 18:05

Yeah Kealon agree with the others, great writing here mate as Rach says loads of fine lines, great stuff see ya soon Jeff

Rachel Bond

Sat 14th Nov 2009 01:03

At least every night you're not falling asleep WITH a stranger...
Brilliant poem...cant select a few words as they're all good and in their place together.
Apologies for being unable to 'progress' you Kealan although I think you have heard of Liverpool so maybe I m not counted here :)

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Thu 5th Nov 2009 15:51

i like it 'ideaology can be a whore' that's so now ha x

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kealan coady

Wed 4th Nov 2009 12:48

thanks for your comments lads, all criticism is gratefully welcomed.

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Dave Bradley

Tue 3rd Nov 2009 19:44

Kealan

Thanks for your comment on mine. This of yours shows talent - it needs more work to iron out weaker parts but there is an abundance of ideas and interesting combinations

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Andy N

Sun 1st Nov 2009 22:31

nice stuff m8... for some reason i keep thinking you need a but on the last bit so 'every night i fall asleep / a stranger' becomes 'but every night i fall asleep / a stranger' - nice still.

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