Girl in a Lake

by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Monday 23rd August 2010 12:03 pm (first posted Thursday 12th November 2009 11:48 am)

Girl in a Lake

on heavy eyes the full moon cast gilded shadows

swan path shafting seductive to the shore where

she dropped her clothes and entered liquid light

jewelled feet icy lustrous pale arms high uplifted

now wide eyes of unwavering clarity enraptured

dream-wooing dream-possessed she sank gleaming

to her knees in the bitter midnight water open palms

thrust upward - reaching - offering - beseeching -

through her hands she felt sweet vines tumble upon

white breasts mellow blossoms shining wetly dark eyes

fixed the blinding moon enchanted - ravished - a black

mass mounted the shuddering lake a nervous breeze

whipped the water invisible leaves slipped chill into

gobbling waves drooling tongues licking snatching at her

nakedness pushing silken thighs against hunched rocks

aghast she reared from their sucking mouths stumbled

back to shore where

trembling uncontrollably

she folded her clothes

over her mind

Cynthia Buell Thomas

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Jeff Dawson

Tue 8th Dec 2009 22:26

Hi Cythnia, lovely description and mystery, enjoyed reading it, best wishes Jeff

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Tue 24th Nov 2009 10:22

I would liken this poem to a 'nouveau cuisine' meal accompanied with a fine glass of red wine. Delightful in it's presentation,subtle imagery and consumption, hower ulimately leaving one hungry for more at it's conclusion. ;-))

sian howell

Mon 23rd Nov 2009 21:56

what a wonderful weave of smooth sensual sensation...sensational indeed !. thanks for your comments..I am trying out a slightly different style so I'm pleased it works...I really wasn't sure to be honest...Sian X

jane wilcock

Sat 21st Nov 2009 23:47

Hi Cynthia, thanks for your great support of Horse Power, written as a companion to Apple Power. Your comments have really encouraged me! I like the Girl in the Lake poem but would take the word path out of the swan line as without it I feel the swans glide better?I dont know if you'd agree. Its a really deep and emotional poem but has a positive ending, a learning from experience perhaps.

winston plowes

Thu 12th Nov 2009 13:43

Loved this one Cynthia... It is the smooth galaxy chocolate of the poetic world. Strange choice of last line I thought but I also thought that line really worked well. had the sense of being alowed to whitness a secret and personal ceremony. Win

Marianne Louise Daniels

Thu 12th Nov 2009 13:14

I think this is excellent!
You have weaved a seductive tapestry that has tangled me up in face of the siren - I am in awe!
There are many lines I really like but "swan path shifting seductive to the shore" lulled me in perfectly.
Brilliant work.
x

Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 12th Nov 2009 11:55

I would like to know what people think of this. Mr Waling, it is much altered as you suggested.

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