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The endless journey

Leaves kick along the concrete path

Savaged by wind and feet

On a cat soaked morning

With boys on bikes

Underpass hanging

Looking everywhere and at nobody

Their eyes say guilty

I’m part of the gang

Yeah so what

Leave me alone

I’ve done nothing wrong

Cars nose round the roundabout

Tail lights redden

Resigned impatience

Horns and brakes castrating

Any chance movement

The radio blurts out its machine gun lies

Tripping off the tongue like so much static

Saying it’s the start of the weekend

When I know better it’s just another day

 

On the side roads the cobbles smooth and shiny

Fight off the rain

Daring anybody to walk along

Their slithering paths

The traffic lights change in twenty second bursts

Stop start

Stop start

e-cig smoke belch’s out of car windows

busy fingers and thumbs on mobile phones

as the drizzle draggle continues

across the screen

and I want to get out

put my hoodie up

head down

and ears plugged into a different zone

hands in pockets

to tramp along with the rest

but I sit there inching along

the endless tail until at last a welcome break

and the drizzle slows and stops

as I enter another world

a universe apart from where

I have come

Three lanes and some space in between

🌷(5)

◄ The rhythm of the trees

is he ►

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Martin Elder

Sun 31st Dec 2017 18:53

Thanks for reading this Keith. Hope it hasn't made you too depressed but I guess you are living in a nicer climate with a lot more sun. Though I do know a number of people who have SAD lamps in order to cope with the winter months.
Hope you had a good Christmas
and have a brilliant New year. look forward to reading more of your work in 2018
Cheers
Martin

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keith jeffries

Fri 29th Dec 2017 21:44

Martin, this poem paints a depressing but true picture of suburban life in all its dreariness. It was good for me to read it as it spelled out the words Seasonally Affected Depression something which I was able to escape from. Your use of imagery is captivating. The poem has a powerful quality. Thank you. Keith

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Martin Elder

Tue 19th Dec 2017 14:54

Thank you so much Hannah.

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Mon 18th Dec 2017 21:26

An amazing use of language. Very strong, creative.
'The radio blurts out its machine gun lies'
Love this poem.

Hannah

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Martin Elder

Tue 5th Dec 2017 09:59

Thanks to Colin Ray and Tina for liking
and thanks to Cynthia to commenting much appreciated
cheers
Martin

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 3rd Dec 2017 18:15

Really, really good. The imagery is terrific, in its diversity, totally enveloping.

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