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The rhythm of the trees

The music of the axe

 can be heard half a mile away

singing and swinging

As it falls and bites

The even rhythm of sweat and spittle

In the big gnarled and calloused hands

Marked with drizzle from sinewed flesh

Every blow counted across

Arms legs and back

revealed being almost as old

As the tree, itself

among great searing knotted oaks

That look on through nodding shimmering leaves

Through swathes of swaying outline breeze

That Quake with each splintered stroke

As the tree begins to snarl

Crackle and creak like the parts

It will become

Finally Submitting to blow after blow from

Sharpened blades

when this father of the wood

Will be joined to enlist

To be mauled and hauled

To the yards

Where it is

Dragged cut and spliced

before finally, shaped shaved and tarred

nailed with all

Its cousins

To sail through storm and spray

For lands, as yet unknown

As do all those who ride the waves

For duty

For king and

For country

 

 

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◄ Dance of death

The endless journey ►

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Martin Elder

Thu 25th Jan 2018 16:54

Thanks for liking this poem Big Sal

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Martin Elder

Wed 22nd Nov 2017 18:40

Many thanks to Rob. Hannah, Jon, Colin, Suki, David Keith and Ray

Rob
I am afraid there are times when I get very lazy with my punctuation. smack across the knuckles for me. Though I do appreciate the sentiment of the lumberjack song always well worth a listen.
Hannah
I totally agree with you. This comes form a time when trees where chopped down by hand and much of our house, furniture and ships were made from oak. This has meant that many of our so called forests are no longer so. some having little or no trees to speak of,whilst others have been replanted with fast growing pines.
Jon
I suspect I am like you and Hannah in that I feel that I have quite and affinity with trees although not really a hugger, I like the very living nature of them. Oak trees in particular take a long time to grow lasting for hundreds of years if they remain untouched. I often wonder what tales they would tell if they could speak
David
I am honoured that you refer to Seamus Heaney with regard to this poem. I find the natural beauty of nature itself in flora and fauna in all of its glory incredible
Keith
thanks for that. I often worry that sometimes I am a bit too wordy in my efforts to try and describe what I feel and see in my minds eye.
Ray
thank you as ever for your reading and appreciation. I think you are right in that there has always been a connection between men and trees and therefore wood
Colin
I am truly fascinated but what you state about what you do with wood, is this a hobby or work? some of these things have seemed to me to be almost a dying art at times though I do know there are still a few folk keeping these old trades alive. I always feel its sad that when trees are cut down now either to build another wretched road or for some other ridiculous purpose that the timber is wasted being either cut up for logs or simply cut into wood chippings, when there are so many endless creative purposes they could be put to
Suki
glad you liked the poem and it made you think of 'Shipbuilding' and therefore starting the debate. I personally although being a great fan of Elvis Costello and having seen live twice in the dim distant past like both versions.
Once heard one of the attractions describe Chet Baker at the recording of shipbuilding as a wreck of a man at the time but had still managed that magnificent solo.
Once again thank you all so much for reading and commenting and to Beno for liking
it uplifts me to make feel I am not writing total bilge
Cheers guys
Martin

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Wed 22nd Nov 2017 10:02

Suki and David - I enjoyed hearing both versions again - I think I prefer Robert Wyatt's despite being a big Elvis fan. There was a bit of a young Brit indie jazz revival in the early 80's which I remember quite clearly getting into: Everything But the Girl, Working Week, Weekend, Carmel to name a few. At the time it very much acted as my entry into a different world of jazz beyond that of the commercial big bands and Kenny Balls beloved by many parents. Sry to stray off topic Martin. Col.

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suki spangles

Tue 21st Nov 2017 22:19

Hi David,

Yes, you're right! Thanks for sharing this too, really enjoyed! This poem obviously hit the mark..

SS

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raypool

Tue 21st Nov 2017 22:04

I've come late to this poem Martin - and all the comments have done service . I think about the saying Hearts of Oak which perhaps conjures up the pairing of the tree and the men who utilized them as you well describe.

Ray

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keith jeffries

Tue 21st Nov 2017 17:30

Superb. Keith

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keith jeffries

Tue 21st Nov 2017 17:30

Martin, what magnificent use of the English Language. Descriptions beyond comparison. I was transported directly to where it was happening. Well done and thank you. Keith

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suki spangles

Tue 21st Nov 2017 15:03

Hi Martin,

Your poem, especially the end, reminded me of this song from way back when I was still at school.

Lovely descriptive imagery in your poem too. Nice one!

Suki

https://youtu.be/UjUkjpJa6bY

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Tue 21st Nov 2017 08:19

I read this last night and again this morning and enjoyed all the sounds, smells and noises evoked in your powerfully descriptive lines. I work quite regularly with wood - coppicing, felling, chopping, splitting - as well as reconditioning the tools themselves - axes, billhooks, mauls, shaves, loppers etc - so my senses tuned into this poem quite quickly. For the most part it is a timeless piece of writing but the final twist adds an unexpected dimension. All good for me Martin. All the best, Col.

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Jon

Tue 21st Nov 2017 08:04

Hi Martin
This poem is really well described, and I felt quite sad seeing the images that came to mind as I read it.
The tree seemed human, especially when you describe it submitting to 'blow after blow' and you refer to the tree as ' this father of the wood'.
Really well written though. Graphic and unsettling.
Thanks for recent comments too.

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Mon 20th Nov 2017 20:46

You bring to life in this poem the tragedy and violence against a living entity, a tree.
I always feel sad when I hear the electric saws against trees.
You reveal here so graphically the assault on nature by humans.

Hannah

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Robert Mann

Mon 20th Nov 2017 20:11

Martin - 'I'm a lumberjack and I'm OK'. I liked this piece, but the lack of punctuation did make it difficult to read the first couple of times. I try not to be a pedant, but I feel that for the sake of a couple of commas and full stops, both the impact and flow would benefit. You know I'm a fan, so I hope you don't mind me saying.
Rob

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