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Why cant she write poems....?

Why can't she write poems when she's  happy?

They're all just

"Once upon a time

There was a ......

And she was ......."

And something happens

Then more stuff happens

But none of it is very interesting

And she fears she is in danger of

Living happily ever after.

But along comes sorrow 

With its angst and

What ifs?

And its need for

Deep profundities.

Its search for the perfect

Turn of phrase

To hold its fragile body

Of work.

Its resounding proclamation

That all is not yet

As it should be.

Oh joy! There is still work to be done.

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Hazel ettridge

Sat 14th Apr 2018 18:43

Goodness me, I thought I had already thanked Graham, Martin and Brian. So much for brain closing down.

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Hazel ettridge

Sat 14th Apr 2018 18:41

Thanks for the comment Adam and for the further comment Cynthia. I think it's to do with the part of my brain that lights up and the part of my brain that closes down when I'm in certain frames of mind.

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Adam Whitworth

Sat 14th Apr 2018 11:35

Hi Hazel

In answer to your first line perhaps we can simply say- Try Harder! As your last line indicates, a difficult challenge can be a joy.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 14th Apr 2018 11:00

I don't agree with Graham, or you too, I suppose. But, I do agree that readers seem to want more of the 'angst' poetry than the celebratory. I appreciate that the reader's viewpoint is not the purpose of the poem at all. But, still, the 'reader' is always there in the poet's mind, or I doubt that we would write. I think that poetry is about 'sharing' the human condition. Writing is communication, a two-way street; it requires reading. A kind of 'immortalization' of our personal space, as only 'we' can 'say it.'

That said, this is really an excellent little poem, the sort that 'sticks in your mind' like that famous little piece 'Leisure' which, once memorised, or even read, burrows into your head and lives there forever.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 9th Apr 2018 09:53

The poets malaise I'm afraid Hazel!

When things are running sweetly, we always worry when they'll go wrong (as if to prepare ourselves) and need repairing.

No-one wants to tempt fate by wishing some drama upon themselves but sadly there is much more inspiration from bad things than good.

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Martin Elder

Mon 9th Apr 2018 09:44

Hazel you write great poetry whether or not it is laced with something sweet or not.
Nice one

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Hazel ettridge

Sun 8th Apr 2018 20:28

Cynthia, correction much appreciated. I probably knew that way back in my school days - in fact I can almost remember being confused about using apostrophes for possession for everything but 'its '.
Thanks also for your positive comments. Even more appreciated!

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sun 8th Apr 2018 19:43

IMO, really good. Excellent thought process and supporting vocab. Love it.

May I make a small correction? It's that nasty 'its' and 'it's'.
Possession is 'its' and the contraction of 'it is' is 'it's'. This work is so good, and on an international 'page poetry' platform, that I'm taking a risk showing you this correction. (I'm not sure how to send a private email, or I would have used that 'message' method.)

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Sun 8th Apr 2018 18:03

Hazel - throw in a few f's and c's...that should help! ??

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