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AIR IN THE MORNING

AIR IN THE MORNING

 

The morning air speaks loss;

slides through a sunlit moment

as eyes open to her memory.

 

From across damp fields

shrill hammering signals

a disconsolate world

where trees stand huddled

under saturated clouds.

 

Sharp black wings

tear the sky with flight;

a feathered firework erupting

until the air would burst

from its heaviness.

 

Nothing but this pale grey

absence - a solitary man

watches the shining phrases

of rain on the river.

 

Published in Black Market Re-view, Issue 4, September 2017

 

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john short

Wed 9th May 2018 13:28

Hi Frances,

Wow thanks for the nice comments. Glad you liked it. It's been a troublesome poem, not the easiest and needed a ton of sporadic tinkering.

Frances Macaulay Forde

Wed 9th May 2018 04:25

Yes, I agree with Ray.

Loved the first stanza.

The whole poem is carefully and successfully edited and atmospheric.

Favourite lines:

"Sharp black wings

tear the sky with flight;"

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john short

Tue 8th May 2018 22:15

Hi Ray

Thanks for your interest and comments. This was written years ago and has had countless re-workings. Quite a relief to finally get it right (and published).

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raypool

Tue 8th May 2018 20:40

Lovely atmosphere poem - I do like this sort of descriptive work; I enjoy your posts John. Speaks of sensitivity and awareness beyond the norm. The last verse consolidates the vision.

Ray

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