When he said there are no words
I knew he told the truth,
and love poured in to heal the wound
where words would try to help.
I know you can't describe a gap
in lives so badly rent,
but nothing's lost that's truly learned
and lessons taught when truly earned
to help by kind consent.
This seems to speak of something profound and philosophical in its outlook.
Nice one Ray,
Love it Ray. Succinct and perfectly condensed lines.
elPintor
Sun 1st Jul 2018 16:17
..makes for fine morning contemplation, Ray.
That is so good Ray. It lilted along like one of my rhymes in perfect meter needing no end-rhyme. It encapsulated all you wanted to say in a small space which held my attention. Well done ?
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raypool
Tue 3rd Jul 2018 16:22
Thanks Don. Nice to be appreciated ( and no 4 letter words!)
David, You're right about gaps - beyond description. Just a sentiment all told.
Rachel, thanks, I like to try to be uplifting sometimes.
A nice compliment Laura, thank you. You especially know how easy it is to derail a poem. I appreciated your advice from the start.
Got it Martin, many thanks. I'm glad that came over.
Thanks for all the likes folks: Keith, Darren, Anya, Pat.
Ray x