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The summer bade us farewell

as he strolled the river Irwell.

His mind constantly at war.

 

He perched upon its banks

yet with no reverence or thanks

cast stones to make tranquil, no more.

 

How is a man to be himself,

chasing dreams of elusive wealth?”

His being felt rotten to its core.

 

"Ravaged with external voices

I lament the infernal choices

that made the man I recognise, no more”.

 

His mind, now saturated with talk,

a well-worn blackboard, tattooed in chalk,

scarred with the lessons of a life that's gone before.

 

“Is this all some terrible dream

I find myself betwixt and between?

Do I cast myself and make tranquil, once more?

 

With no more caring and no more knowing,

my empathy deprived from growing

There is nothing left I care to live for, or fight for, I’m sure.

 

This impotent wail, verse and chapter,

The maker of my own mental captor.

I am broken. An unused token. Worthless now, forevermore”.

 

The poor wretch's pain was as this city,

Full of promise, yet without pity

Did he fail to unlock destinies door?

 

Or is it merely just a passing view?

Perhaps. So I put his destiny to you.

Should he rid himself of noise, and everything more?

 

This ceaseless madness and mental curse.

Would eternal silence be better or worse?

Is this life too complicated to ignore?

 

Or will this life surely improve?

Could helping others, his torment sooth.

Is he selfish, selfless, or in need of something more?

 

Perhaps it is not for us to say,

For each of us must find our way

And decide if it is us or others we adore.

 

But being your only reason

can be tantamount to treason.

Remember that we are part of something bigger. Greater. More.

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Comments

Frances Macaulay Forde

Sat 21st Jul 2018 02:44

Yes, I agree with Brian and Jane but question the use of italics and ellipses.

Although I think I understand your intent to show his thoughts, I at first believed you were quoting someone else.

Personally, the poem works better for me and is stronger, without them.

<Deleted User> (19836)

Mon 16th Jul 2018 14:07

OMG-I really like this. Very powerful!

<Deleted User> (18980)

Mon 16th Jul 2018 12:40

Matt - I like the rhyming pattern throughout.

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