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Daydreaming

This perpetual daydream

drifting off into the sublime

Picturesque enchantment serranated by cohesive rhymes

A superlative line to all of your expressions for they surely are devine

Toiling deadlock, I stand still defined

Only shaped by exuding light exlempary of a shrine

 

Though hollow as a well with no end in sight

plummet into the aspiration I will

plummet with all my might

Such imaginitive vision 

such an inventive tale

misconstrued with insight

Again the heart prevails

Pining ►

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Phillip Kelly

Mon 10th Sep 2018 21:26

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The grammar lexis in your writing is really very sdvanced and in this poem the continual complex lexis gives a sense of gliding and flying and continual floaty graceful movement

A superlative line to all of your expressions for they

surely are devine

I especially like this poem because its packed with emotion..... And the way you stand alone line SURELY ARE DEVINE
Works perfectly

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