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The Long Fuse

Fear soaked, I drag myself upright -

unsteady but true at last,

ready to speak

to the  patient crowd,

whose forebearance lasted out.

Now willing to use my voice-

though weary and torn

by shattered hopes

and shards of spite

swallowed for

far

too

long.

So though trepidation

and much hesitation

threaten to engulf me,

it is no longer enough just to survive

another day,

to be content with grey dusty

grim musty ...silence.

These words within-

sparkled fireworks ignited-

more than sound or noise

but coloured magic of sorts,

exploding airbourne streams of

simple

innocent

laughter-

setting the sky

to rainbow shades.

The crowd raise their gaze in wonder

◄ Christmas

The Park Bench 'swing'. ►

Comments

steve mellor

Wed 13th Jan 2010 12:48

Hi again
I don't comment often (limited ability) but I must tell you that I get little (or no) enjoyment out of 'performing' but I may get there one day. Are we of simuilar minds?

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Steve Regan

Wed 13th Jan 2010 12:45

I'm guessing this is about poetry performance, and maybe the fear that some have to overcome to do it. The piece works very well Sian. Here are the prhases that rocked me most on reading it ...

"shards of spite"

and

"grey dusty

grim musty ...silence."

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winston plowes

Wed 13th Jan 2010 11:25

Re read this today. what an opening, full of aprehension and inner strength. Thinking Henry Fonda for some reason? Win x

Fear soaked, I drag myself upright -
unsteady but true at last,
ready to speak
to the patient crowd,

<Deleted User> (7164)

Tue 12th Jan 2010 19:48

So. Did you finally give it a blast then? Poetry performance or fireworks display, it's very colourful in its own way.
Nice, very nice poem Sian.

Janet.x

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winston plowes

Tue 12th Jan 2010 18:17

Nice one this, Sian with a positive end. you have a strong voice. win x

<Deleted User> (7073)

Tue 12th Jan 2010 12:49

Most of us have slow burn fuses.... ;-)Fun though when the fizzing stops and BOOM.. ha ha.....great poem ;-)
TC X

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 12th Jan 2010 10:46

This is excellent, Sian, imaginative and emotive,with very concise, expressive diction. It tells a great story of personal liberation and courage. And a 'catchy' title too, one that is almost a three-word summary as well as an introduction - very hard to do.

Check 'silence'.

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Francine

Tue 12th Jan 2010 01:46

I can relate to this in many ways Sian.
It takes courage to speak publicly...
Laughter relieves the tension and captures
the audience's attention so that you can get your message across.

Love these lines:
'These words within-
sparkled fireworks ignited-
more than sound or noise
but coloured magic of sorts,
exploding airbourne streams of
simple
innocent
laughter-
setting the sky
to rainbow shades.
The crowd raise their gaze in wonder'

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