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Smashed fragments huddled for warmth

Beneath a yawning ambivalent sky

Thynne Street shivers in the early dark

broken bits of Britain stir

and walk out scarf wrapped

coughing like gypsies dead from living

crackles scattered on a floor of frost

where life is a Londis of use-by dates

and mars bar breakfasts bought in haste

choking on the fumes of the bank quay station

fragranced by soap factory smoke.

 

Frost and hail trail footprints grey

beneath a cold and stone washed sky

and lies like words:

community, and

centre

as hid by ugly blankets of smog black brickwork

who knows what lives are lived and died

families struggle

food and clothing

toys and drugs

muslim clothing white hat white trousers

walking the hail caked streets to mosque.

 

Beneath a yawning ambivalent sky

morning has broken – like the first nose

of nighttime’s  heated angry debacle

overtired blue wicked one-a-penny

one-a-penny

wicked by the bottle

waking to recriminate on who said what and why

and why indeed

wicked by the bottle load

ten-a-penny

ten-a-penny

shut your noise.

 

Beneath a yawning ambivalent sky

broken bits of Britain stir

and make their shivering faltering walks

as heat escapes their very bones

to who knows where – who cares

to idle bag lady vagrant stand about

town centre hang out window shop

and dream a dream and plan escape

each broken piece of Britain dreams

beneath a yawning ambivalent sky

of gluing our lives together again

each fragment fastened to the next

with approximations to love.

state of Western society

◄ Hearts and flowers and shit

Darkness lands with an ear-splitting bang ►

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DG

Sat 6th Feb 2010 14:13

Thanks all. I think I've figured out why it has that pretty thing about it: when wrote this, I was reminiscing on delivering christmas hampers and presents to deprived families for a local charity.
I'd strongly recommend getting involved - not in a streets of london sort of "my life's rubbish... oh I stand corrected: life in general is miserable and unfair therefore I've cheered up now" sort of a way, but more for the interaction with the families you're helping - you can't help but smile when the little ones are telling you how excited they are about christmas.

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Fri 5th Feb 2010 00:58

Well you must have got up on the wrong side of the bed the day you wrote this one Dermot.
Very cold, grey and bleak.
Some great imagery and i love the yawning sky lines too and the bits that Rachel likes. Nice one.

Janet.x

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winston plowes

Thu 4th Feb 2010 10:42

Hi Dermot... Loved this. You have encapsulated the inbetween world where people dont fit, a broken and frozen morning skillfully described in this piece. Is Britain broken? I think bits of it have always been broken (And have been in a worse state than they are now) Can we mend it? Probably not, just rearange the broken pieces to look different. win

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Rachel McGladdery

Thu 4th Feb 2010 10:16

Bleak but strangely pretty. I really liked the 'one a penny..ten a penny'bit and just thought the entire poem was incredibly evocative. Fantastic.
Rach
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kealan coady

Thu 4th Feb 2010 09:58

good rythm and the repitition of the yawning sky works well to keep the stanza'a open to each other.

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