Soul Mates & Muses
You found your
soul mate?
I’m genuinely
happy for you!
Mermaids
and unicorns
are more common
than soulmates.
Please, do the lost
and lonely among us
a favor of great
significance,
Make her
your muse
so we can
feel love too.
Comments
I like this.
I wonder if there's a problem with writing it in longer (dare I say more 'natural') lines, something like this:
You found your soul mate?
I’m genuinely happy for you!
Mermaids and unicorns
are more common than soulmates.
Please do the lost and lonely among us
a favor of great significance,
Make her your muse so we can feel love too.
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victoriavautaw@gmail.com
Sun 10th Feb 2019 17:55
Thanks for reading and your feedback Adam. I agree, sometimes simple and uncomplicated is better, but a poem reads different depending on the line breaks. I recorded both versions. I can easily waste hours on a word or line break! I wish it was an easier process for me and not overthink it, but it seems to come with the gift.