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Her private pleasure.


She watches him,
aching for his touch
Tracing the outline of his lips,
longing to kiss them.
His eager response,
thrilling her,
striking a chord,
deep and sensous.
She longs to feel his fingers,
gentle,
caressing.
Teasing her breast and taunting her,
making her yearn for more.
She imagines him,
tasting her
as she pleasures herself.
She can almost feel him,
easing into her,
making her gasp.
He turns and catches her eye.
She looks away.
Afraid he'll see.
Afraid he'll know her secret.

◄ I am firewood

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Jeff Dawson

Thu 18th Feb 2010 22:12

Hi Kathryn, should imagine you'll have a few women doing the same! nothing wrong with a bit of fantasy and you've made the situation more intense with every line, good stuff Jeff X

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John Aikman

Thu 18th Feb 2010 22:08

If you hunt about on here there's quite a few similar poems (not that I have, you understand) but they are nearly always 'unsatisfying' as they rarely add anything to the genre. I can, again 'see where you are coming from' but I agree with Graham, you need to get a few ideas that are, at the very least, new to you. As a personal description of something, it's OK, but for me a poem has to fizz a bit...add something to the mix...smell of sulphur...or have an oblique empty hollow that others can pour their own stuff into. As Cynthia says...it's a fairly common pastime (well, it is in our household) so, go on....make it new!

:)

jx

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Graham Sherwood

Thu 18th Feb 2010 21:42

Kathryn, I like what you are trying to do with these pieces and wonder if you have read any of DH Lawrence's descriptions of passion etc. They might give you some great ideas.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thu 18th Feb 2010 16:14

Very well turned lines about a common past-time. At least the object of fantasy is a real man. And, by the way, when 'she looks away' - too late - he knows.

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