SHADOWS
Shadows drifting
silently shifting
announce the day
come what may
Vows all broken
words unspoken
a slim gold ring
a wedding token
Lies dicarded
on the floor
remnant from
the night before
Love is dying
she is crying
i am lying
in shadows
Comments
Hi Trevor. What stands out to me is the almost hypnotic pattern of the words, like teardrops falling - and how shadows are a good metaphor for the dark doom of the piece, also how real seems the ring and what it should stand for. (no guarantee). The last line is like a dark refuge.
Ray
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trevor homer
Thu 11th Jul 2019 10:40
Thanks for your always insightful comments Ray. T.