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I'm Simple this way

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I'm simple this way,

this way- leaning.

Watching the want,

this way- fading.

You're always this way

his way- leaning.

I'm holding this loss

this way- leaving.

 

When you leave

the conversation

before you've left

the company-

when I've left

your thoughts

before I've left

your sight-

When your touch

lets go

before my grasp

when your warmth

leaves not a trace,

not a trace behind-

then, It's time for me,

time for me to go.

◄ Viento Norte

My fear precedes me ►

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winston plowes

Tue 6th Apr 2010 22:54

P.S. 4th line You'r is missing an e :-)

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winston plowes

Tue 6th Apr 2010 22:51

Tommy... loved this one. As ever, not mainstream. no problem there.

I was looking at a poets works recently and wondering why it appealed so much?? took me a while but I think it was because all the words were short and simple well known words. same here with your piece. Most complex word is probably 'grasp' so there you go. Liked it a lot Tommy. will bedrawn back to it tomorrow. win x

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Ann Foxglove

Thu 11th Mar 2010 17:34

I like your poem. I think it would sound very good read aloud. Simple language put to haunting good use.

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