Mae Foreman

M15tak3s- A Whateverette

by Mae Foreman

Saturday 3rd August 2019 10:09 am

"Use your words" everyone said

They didn't say "use them well!"

Weave a lavish text in silken thread

A lustrous web for pomposity to dwell

"Use your words! The fancier the better!"

A silken scarf, a silken shirt, a shiny silken sweater!

And a pretty pair of sparkly silken handstiched socks

Specially made for the daintiest of dainty feet to use!

Wear your festive, silken suit outside and stride around for about ten blocks

How far will the parade go until you realize you have no pants and shoes?

P.S. When I make grammatical errors, or any kind of mistakes be a dear and tell me, friend!

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Comments

Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 15:12

No! Of course not! "Ulterior Motif" is the mistake! It's actually "motive"! "Motif" is a pattern in art and music, while "motive" is something that motivates you! That was the error! I'd say quite the opposite of thick as a brick dear Don! You have a brilliant mind! ?
Mae

Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 14:41

Wotif is an error Mae?
Who wrote that New Age dic?
Believe it's someone they call Don
He's thick as bloody brick......

Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 14:35

Thank you Jason, in a moment of self-doubt having you as a friend is a blessing! The King's New Clothes, had fogotten all about that one, it pretty much sums it up, spot on!
Don, good idea! That my friend is called good marketing! I could call it: "Wotif And An Ulterior Motif!" There and then you have your first error, mind you!
Thank you guys?
Mae

Jason Bayliss

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 12:35

Mae, firstly considering this is your second language, honestly there are many times I've thought, "Damn, she speaks this better than I do, and it's my only language."
Fear not my friend, your mastery of English is exceptional.
Now as for the poem, oh that made me smile, such a clever little verse with such a clever, cutting little message about how incredibly important it is to avoid, "The emperor's new clothes," and not lose sight of the big picture.
Grammatical errors? We all make them, but don't ever doubt your skill with what I think can be one of the most subtle, expressive and complex languages on the planet. You have a gift.

J. x

Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 12:03

Hey Mae here's an idea
Wanna get a lot more comments?
Post a 'Wotif' lots of errors
Whoosh! come error comments

Don't waste your time with handstitched shocks
Cos that's in New Age dic
Nor trouble you with M15t8k3s
Cos M's give it the tick

(you'll have to error-overload. Sorry gal)

Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 10:08

First of all thank you all! I did try to clean it all up before you had the time to comment!

Adam, there is no risk my friend! Yes of course it's "your"! Thank you! I'm stopping by your profile my friend!

Don, what can I say! Other than "that's an awesome dictionary and I want it!" "Handstiched shocks!" There are no words on this one, put a smile in my face! Now "whateverette" is a new age as you said form of poetry, very radical ?

Devon, fear not! Don't hesitate correct me! I wish it were about commas, but it turns out I'm not a very good poet. When it comes to precision I suck! And while we are on the subject I shouldn't be allowed to type either!

I don't know if it's just me but sometimes I feel like I've forgotten the language!

Thanks all! ?
Mae

Adam Rabinowitz

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 09:33

Mae, greatly enjoyed especially ... a lustrous web for pomposity to dwell.

Friends do tell each other if there is something in their teeth or if their collar is twisted up but ...I understand the trepidation of doing so here. At risk of appearing ignorant and hoping you might still read my poems, long as they are, did you mean to say...wear you festive....or did you mean your festive...

now I am nervous

Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 01:21

Devon - you got nothing to worry about. Oscar Wilde spent a whole afternoon adding a comma then taking it away. There's still hope for you yet. I think there's a rhyme of mine about this dang comma dilemma on my profile. My grand entry to WOL?......

Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 01:16

And I thought handstitched shocks were the latest thing. It says so in my New Age dictionary. Even says they were invented by a Mae Foreman whom I acknowledged in the dictionary. Looks like I'll have to extract it - 'she said she'd had too many drinks at the the so-called time of invention'......

Devon Brock

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 01:07

Lol, Mae, I spotted a few, but I recollected that my first comment on WoL, though praising the poem, mentioned the absence of a comma in an otherwise well punctuated poem, after which I was promptly chastised. Please, pardon my trepidation.

D

Don Matthews

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 01:06

Hey
Mae
Like what
You say

Rhyming's nice
(Used more than twice)
You don't need
My advice

Now Mae, you'll be surprised to learn 'M15t8k3s' is grammatically acceptable according to my New-Age Dictionary (which I wrote) but 'whateverette' is not. It suggests 'whateveritis' (current tense) or 'whateveritwas' (past tense). The author didn't think 'whateverette' made much sense.

Wearing shocks brings added shock value to parading pant-less.

Line six would bring tears of joy to Edgar Alan Poe........

Mae Foreman

Sat 3rd Aug 2019 00:53

So far I've spotted and corrected 5 or 6 of them! Damn, I feel stupid! ??

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