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Storm Crows

 

The silence of the muffled night is shattered by the scraping call of storm crows,

The "Plinking" heavy heat of sunlight plays a tune upon the fences of the park,

The violence of the storm in flight that clatters over gaping fields of corn rows,

Leaves the thinking man to ponder what is levied by the dragon in the dark, 

For from its jaws it spews forth fire to split and crack the muffled blanket,

And from its eyes such tears will fall that smash upon the ground and quench its thirst,

And though the pause between each flash of light will give the thirsty watchers cause to thank it,

With deepening sighs and building fears they know the tears will fall until the rivers burst, 

And when that weight of water breaks its banks and so untethered in the fields flows, 

And though the bone dry fields will try they cannot hope to stem its furious flight,

Every son and daughter that is huddled there together in the dark knows, 

The dragons tears will wash the pavements parched of water in their town tonight,

And when the dragon passes and the day comes,

And each emerge survivors of the squall,

The warnings of their forebears come to haunt them,

"When storm crows caw it's best to heed their call."

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Jason Bayliss

Thu 19th Sep 2019 09:34

Thanks Ruth, I think the dragon of chaos is a pretty accurate metaphor for really violent, angry storms, the roaring of thunder and the sudden and immense power of lightning often puts me in mind of a huge angry dragon just ripping up the sky.

Also thanks to Avishek for liking.

J. x

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 18th Sep 2019 22:58

This piece takes me to a parallel universe halfway between mythic & reality. The dragon could be a metaphor on so many levels. Next time it rains I'll be thinking 'Dragon's Tears'.

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 18th Sep 2019 22:18

Just wanted to say thanks Kevin and Ruth for liking.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 18th Sep 2019 20:05

Thanks Mae and thank you Brian. I'm so pleased you like it Mae, your opinion is very dear to me.
Thanks so much Brian, that is high praise indeed, I don't know what to say except thank you so much.

J. x

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Wed 18th Sep 2019 17:44

Jason - I am naturally attracted to poems that rhyme so this one obviously fits that criteria, and I have to say this is one of the best pieces I've seen on here for some time. Good stuff!

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Mae Foreman

Wed 18th Sep 2019 15:53

Wow, Jason! This is incredible! So beautifully thunderous! Added to my collection of favourites?


x.x.

Mae

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Jason Bayliss

Wed 18th Sep 2019 14:38

Thank you Rose, I couldn't ask for a better compliment. Glad you liked it.

J. x

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Wed 18th Sep 2019 12:49

Jason, you have painted a perfectly worded picture in my mind
inclusive of rumblings!

brilliantly worked piece.







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