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True Names

Show me your true name, the one you can't disguise,

That no-one can pronounce but is written in your eyes,

The one that hides in plain sight in your averted gaze,

The one you keep from passers by and save for he who stays,

Please show me that name, that's carved upon your soul,

For I that know the half of you would like to know the whole,

Let me see it naked, with all it's fragile hopes and fears,

I'll cherish every part of it, its promises and tears,

Let me see your true name, as I have shown you mine,

The one that's carved upon your soul by the hand of time,

The one that lives beneath the distant, casual disguise,

The one that no-one can pronounce, that's written in your eyes.

 

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 11th Jan 2020 21:54

Thanks mate, I'd have never spotted that.?

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kimberly

Sat 11th Jan 2020 20:21

I’ll help you out.

Last line: “no-ne”

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 11th Jan 2020 20:04

Cynthia, I'm sorry mate, you're gonna have to help me out. I can't see it. Sorry to be a pain ❤️.

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 11th Jan 2020 20:02

No, thank you Cynthia, as I've said before I'm dyslexic so genuinely grateful when people point errors out because I quite often don't see them, so please don't ever hesitate, I really do appreciate it.

J. x

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 11th Jan 2020 15:25

Jason, this is really GOOD! It's SO good, check it for 'tiny' grammatical/spelling errors, and possibly even rhythm. It's in the big, wide world now, and should show you at your absolute best!

I'm taking an awful chance sending this. Honestly, I just want to see it splendid!

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Jason Bayliss

Sat 11th Jan 2020 11:22

Thanks Dragan.

J. x

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Dragan Bozilov

Tue 7th Jan 2020 11:01

Brilliant one!

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 5th Jan 2020 09:01

Thank you all so much, really glad you liked it. I'm in a real writing mode at the moment so rattling a lot of stuff off, and I never really know if anyone will like it apart from me, and even then, most of the time it's just a relief to get the thing of my chest.?

J. x

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Don Matthews

Sat 4th Jan 2020 21:47

Your lines flow so effortlessly Jason....... a joy to read.....

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Tom

Sat 4th Jan 2020 17:43

Brilliant write Jason! This is excellently and beautifully put.

Do.RoThy

Sat 4th Jan 2020 17:16

The name is H. The name is G. The name is D. The name is P. The name is XYZEEE.

What is in a name?? Alphabets...hehehe

Loved it!!! True name, worth reading those lines..deep in the eye, eye to eye ?

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victoriavautaw@gmail.com

Sat 4th Jan 2020 16:34

Beautiful poem Jason. ?

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