Hi Edwin. I'm not sure if I can tell you how to make a poem less prosy - or if I should even attempt. All poets have their own voice - yours appears to be a more literal one - and that's fine if it works for you and your readership.

I see that the River Dee Railway Bridge is in a similar vein to your Bronte poem. The writer is like an eye - describing a scene - with that curious sense of detachment - even when describing tragedy.

I do write prosy poetry too, sometimes. And then there are other times when I go for the whole musical beat thing :) Because I am into performance poetry, I tend to like stuff that will work on a stage - so it has to flow and be understood easily...

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Hi Edwin - welcome to WOL. Some fine poems on your profile page! If you feel like putting one on the blog section I'm sure you'd get some feedback.

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Ps great to be reading you Edwin.. :)

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Hey Edwin hiya and welcome to WOL..press on make a new entry to put your stuff up..if you copy then click on I think it is the fourth or fith from the left it should work for you...can be a bit tricky but it is worth it as it is a great community with many fine poets on here..good to know you are getting out and about to other venues too..How are you? :)

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