Very nice poem Tommy. I like it. With best wishes, Larisa
beauitful, beauitful.. brought a lump to my throat totally..
Terrific, Tommy. The whizzling brain cells are really getting organized again. I always read any posting under your name.
I like this one too Tommy - unless I've completely misread what it's about, like I did on one occasion LOL.
It is well structured and there are many lines in it that resonate. Love the 'shadows cast in backward glances' also the parodox of 'crush of empty spaces'.
I could go on...
good stuff tommo, reactional and the mood is one of vast nostalgia.
I agree with TC...
And these verses are especially moving:
'But this shadow
That you leave
Is cast in backward glances.
And this stone
The memories remain
An aching loss of chances.'
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Sun 9th May 2010 14:16
Poignant poem which speaks to me of displacement and the feeling of internal dislocation that occurrs when what can never be slips painfully through your fingers.TC
I like this very much.
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I liked this a lot Tommy, and nicely balanced in three line verses. Verse three is particularly good words.
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Anthony Emmerson
Thu 13th May 2010 23:09
Hi Tommy,
This seems somewhat of a departure from your usual. I can't add much to what's already been said, but I enjoyed the rhythm, technique, sentiment expressed and particularly this phrase:
"The memories remain
An aching loss of chances."
I know it's a peom full of "if onlys" but I always did have a bittersweet tooth.
Regards,
A.E.