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A banquet spread out in the night sky

Now the day has ended.

Darkness triumphs over light.

 

Deep inside the womb of a cave,

bats with paper thin wings,

hinged with claws

and hanging upside down,

begin to stir from their sleep.

 

Suddenly the flying animals,

half the size of a five pound note,

let out a hunting cry.

 

Then they flutter out of the cave,

in an up draft,

that flows like the gulf stream

and into the blackness rise.

 

They enjoy a banquet of choice insects spread out in the night sky.

 

Satiated, they fly back,

to the safety of the cave,

long before the sun wakens again.

 

🌷(7) 

â—„ The mirror only now reflects

Rosy future â–º

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Abdul Ahmad

Wed 8th Jul 2020 20:11

Jennifer, Nichola and Stephen

Thank you all for your considered judgement on this poem.

Much appreciate the like.

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Stephen Gospage

Wed 8th Jul 2020 17:46

Great one, Abdul.

'Half the size of a five pound note' just nails it.

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Wed 8th Jul 2020 17:41

Love this Abdul x

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jennifer Malden

Wed 8th Jul 2020 15:48

Nice one! Their wings are leathery actually!!! I caught one that had flown into the sittingroom last week, (with gardening gloves on)! amd was surprised how strong the wings were. I like these tiny ones we have here because of all the mosquitos they eat.
Jennifer

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Abdul Ahmad

Tue 7th Jul 2020 12:14

Thank you for your detailed essay on all things bat related.

Fancy guano to gunpowder. The Chinese have a lot to answer for!

Apreciate the like.

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