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MORE RAIN

I watched the rain from a doorway

in shadow pools as dark as light blinded

in a monumental longitude. 

 

With freedom and the urgency of gravity

it shed itself

under a constant sky

taking no prisoners

 

cats and dogs indecisive

slinking for cover. 

 

Collars like funnels

a weeping of spectacles

seeping of shoes

all told the story. 

 

Cars with pallid exhausts made avenues,

trees held their breath,

rodents hunched in reluctant skins. 

 

Suddenly then a door clicked

an inward thrust to a haven of hissing coffee

backs of chairs overwhelmed by coats

talk of more rain. 

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raypool

Sun 8th Nov 2020 19:07

Thank you Brian for liking this - I enjoyed reliving it!

Every poem should have a happy ending Graham, thanks for your thoughts.

Very kind Jennifer. Glad it worked for you.

Ray

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jennifer Malden

Mon 2nd Nov 2020 16:39

One of your very best, Ray, and you set a high standard. Jennifer

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Graham Sherwood

Sat 31st Oct 2020 20:19

The final stanza rounds this off perfectly. I can smell the coffee. I want one

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Sat 31st Oct 2020 19:52

Some great lines in there Ray.

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raypool

Sat 31st Oct 2020 13:34

Thanks Stephen and Michael for reading and enjoying!

Ray

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