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the sea sucks to the leeward side

a subconscious urge

a gut-tug

 

saving lives is automated now

with gravely klaxons bleeping

red buggies on the beach

loudspeaker warnings

and a jet ski throbbing

 

such a tiny strip of sand

is safe

like one inch marked

on a ruler

 

we all start here in the safety zone

then slowly we get dragged across

seduced by the rip

 

as we begin, womb-tied

yet some are swept away

a few sucked under

and gone from view

lost to sight

around the monumental headland

 

 

image - PinCheck

 

 

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Ray Miller

Mon 19th Jul 2010 15:36

Hello Ann. You've some great phrases in this - gut-tug, womb-tied and the 3rd verse." gravely klaxons" is a bit of a mystery to me and I'd have liked something more powerful at the end. Enjoyed.

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Ann Foxglove

Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:13

Yes, but it's all about death. And yes, I love the sea too!

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Andy N

Mon 19th Jul 2010 08:11

wasn't that gloomy or doomy for me, ann. i love the sea and i enjoyed this piece, in particular the first stanza..

nice one! x

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:52

Good for you!!

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DG

Sun 18th Jul 2010 19:32

I've just done a seafaring one too

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Ann Foxglove

Sun 18th Jul 2010 18:38

More gloom and doom from down beach!

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