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Love in Winter

 

At grubby winter’s evening time,

They waited in the cold and dark.

He saw her run across the park;

Each changed their taxis in between,

To take no chance of being seen.

He opted for a jazzy blue;

She wrapped herself in guilty green.

 

Later, beneath a small squashed sky,

They looked back at the empty room,

Scraped featureless by some new broom,

With all scraps licked up off the floor.

They took due care to close the door,

Went back to mime a life passed by;

They’d done this sort of thing before.

◄ The Log Sledge

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Stephen Gospage

Thu 2nd Sep 2021 17:09

And thanks to New Shoes for liking as well.

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Stephen Gospage

Mon 30th Aug 2021 21:39

Thank you for liking this, Brenda.

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Stephen Gospage

Mon 30th Aug 2021 17:41

Thanks to everyone for all the interest and positive comments on this poem.

Pete, Keith, John, Julie, Adam, Stephen A. and Tom - your comments are most appreciated.

Greg, Bramwell, Rudyard and Holden - thank you for the likes.

I was trying to convey the depth of winter and a certain seediness, which does not detract from the honesty or intensity of the love experienced or 'snatched', as you say, Keith (which probably fits the timeline here). Adam - words like 'grubby' and 'guilty' reflect, to my mind, a certain social perception of such encounters rather than any moral judgement on the actions of the individuals concerned. There is a sense in which they are trapped, as you say, John. But love may triumph even when it is illicit. In the end, the balance and happiness of a society may be influenced by all sorts of behaviour. Depending on the circumstances, the overall impact may be posiitive or negative, as outside the lover's bubble, such trysts may affect many other, possibly innocent, parties.

Once again, glad you all enjoyed it.

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Tom

Mon 30th Aug 2021 17:06

I'm envious of your talent at conveying so much in such a neat few lines. Brilliant writing which I thoroughly enjoyed.

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Stephen Atkinson

Mon 30th Aug 2021 12:32

Wonderfully succinct & atmospheric - as usual!

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Adam Whitworth

Mon 30th Aug 2021 11:36

The shame here is that 'Love' goes hand in hand with 'Guilty'.
Be that as it may, you've been vouchsafed a great set of lines here, authentic proof the muse is as vigorous as ever.

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julie callaghan

Mon 30th Aug 2021 10:37

I really like this. A great story told in just a few cleverly written words.

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John Coopey

Sun 29th Aug 2021 23:25

Redolent of seediness, Stephen. Even the winter's sky is grubby. You sense the players are trapped. Trapped in the relationships they are escaping from and trapped in the relationship they have entered.

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keith jeffries

Sun 29th Aug 2021 22:49

a well constructed poem which brought about an explosion of images in my mind. A tryst which must resonate with many readers. Times past of loved snatched in the gloom of winter.

I really enjoyed this.
Thank you

Keith

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Pete (edbreathe)

Sun 29th Aug 2021 22:17

This I really like

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