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At Water's Edge

I sat down beside my sunlit grandson,

gazing down into the sparkling lake,

whilst he randomly added twigs and leaves,

to the debris wrought by Winter’s floods.

 

One crinkled old leaf, a veiny old chap,

took my eye beneath the gloom,

 buried, as he was, in a watery tomb.

How had he arrived at this soggy end?

Which currents or breezes had brought him here?

What fate had loosened his grip on the Tree.

What force of Nature had propelled him, thus,

sinewy and sad, brittle, and sere,

which water course or current of air,

had persuaded my leaf to end his life here?

 

The leaf looked up, as the poet looked down,

stately and silent, mottled, and brown,

each refracted in the clear H2O,

Leaf and poet, poet and leaf,

trapped in each other’s fatalistic beliefs,

helping each  to determine and finally know,

the direction of winds, both blasted and shear,

the vagaries of life, which had brought us both here.

 

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John Botterill

Mon 10th Apr 2023 10:06

I really appreciate your analysis, Uilleam. Thanks so much! 😀

Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Sun 9th Apr 2023 23:49

I like the way you juxtapose age with youth, and paint a picture with the minutiae of an anthropomorphised old leaf.

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John Botterill

Fri 7th Apr 2023 23:40

Thanks Ruth. What an utterly brilliant response. I like the idea of you having elocution lessons. You certainly have a beautiful voice, Ruth. 😎 Happy Easter to you and your family, too! 😀

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Ruth O'Reilly

Fri 7th Apr 2023 16:12

Lovely to read that you also get lost in the wonder of a leaf at times. I love the bit about fate causing the leaf to loosen it's grip from the tree...and the leaf looking up whilst the poet looks down on it

My mum used to enter elocution contest's as a child therefore introduced me to poetry through the idea that I would 'memorise and recite' a piece ha,ha this one just came to mind

Upon a river
Like a boat
I saw an autumn leaf afloat
A yellow ship
With golden mast
It fluttered once
Then drifted past
There came a green and gauzy fly
Who flew down
As the ship sailed by
On the deck with wings spread wide
He sat and floated
With the tide
Oh wind blow softly (if you blow)
Oh river water gently flow
Please keep the yellow leaf boat dry
And safe for little sailor fly!

A direct download from my 8 yr old self ha ha no idea who wrote this poem😄

Wishing You Gail & the grandchildren a very Happy Easter 🐣 Stay Eggcelent🐰

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John Botterill

Wed 5th Apr 2023 22:07

Thank you, Stephen and Keith for your lovely comments. It means a lot to me 😀

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Stephen Gospage

Wed 5th Apr 2023 21:59

A fine poem which brings us face to face with our dependence on nature, and its interaction with us, John.

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keith jeffries

Wed 5th Apr 2023 13:05

This poem held my attention as I had no idea where it would lead.
Thanks
Keith

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